LAL – Peer Revision

Class began the normal way. Students didn’t have a WA to complete, so after writing down homework, they moved right into reading.

Before we began writing today, students looked at their figurative language quizzes. I went over a few answers, and students were able to ask questions if they had any before putting them into their binders.

It is video Tuesday, so our writing prompt came in the form of a video; however, I chose this one based on recent events in our school where a pretty devastating rumor was spread about a student that caused a lot of uproar and reaction from the administration and law enforcement, but when it was investigated further, it turns out the student never said what people were saying he did. Wow. I think that can be a lesson for all of us that even sometimes when we have the best intentions, our actions or our words can have adverse consequences, consequences we might not even mean or realize. This video reminds us of that.

I invited students to write about something from the video that impacted them or a line that stood out. I suggested they write their own “To this day” about something someone once said or did that has really stuck with them, or I suggested they write about something they did or said that they regret.

After writing, students moved into peer revision. They underlined the figurative language in their piece (if they didn’t have any, they were supposed to leave a comment in order to remind themselves to add it) and got with a partner/group.

I reminded students that their focus should be revising (making the writing better) instead of editing (making the writing correct – grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc.). Students were supposed to use the checklist below to look at their partner’s paper and then leave some DETAILED comments – two comments on things they found really interesting and three comments about things that could be improved (see the sentence stems below to help with this part).

LAL Peer Revision Checklist

—I think you should start this paragraph/example over because

—You should rewrite this sentence because

—Right here, you should add.because.

—You should delete this part because

—This part could be made better if you

—This part doesn’t work because

This took until the end of the class. If students were finished, they exchanged papers at the end of class. If they were not done, they are to finish for homework.


  1. Read for 25 minutes.
  2. Complete your BT reflection (if this applies to you).
  3. Finish peer revising (green checklist and comments)